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the maps show the changes in the functional area of a museum in 1988 and after the decoration in 2008. summarise the information by selecting and roporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. task1

the maps show the changes in the functional area of a museum in 1988 and after the decoration in 2008. summarise the information by selecting and roporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. task1
The two maps below gives information about the layout of a
museum
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 in the year 1988 and after the decoration in 2008.
Overall
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,
while
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 the permanent
exhibition
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 space was
lessened
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reduced
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, a number of new amenities, like fountains,
restaurant
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a restaurant
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, and
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also
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apply
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an outdoor
cafe
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 area, were al of them introduced to enhance the visitor experience. In the first phase, the
museum
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exhibition
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 rooms
in
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on
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 both
west
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the west
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 and east
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side
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sides
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located
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are located
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. In the
middle
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middle,
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 there are three layouts
first,
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cafe
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the cafe
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.
and
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And
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 there is a garden which is located exactly in the middle part of the
museum
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.
In addition
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, on the south
side
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 there are other crucial parts of
museum
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,
such
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 as temporary
exhibition
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 on the lower western south
side
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, and there is a tickets exit and entrance part. On the
south
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southeast
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east
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east,
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 there is a shop located close to
coatroom
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the coatroom
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. In 2008, the
museum
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 hold by every sides of the map, the restaurant located on the west
side
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 of the corner and which was first added in the
museum
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. The next to there was a
cafe
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 that with no change, and
also
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 WC. The temporary
exhibition
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 room
located
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is located
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 below, and it has been relocated to a higher location than its original location.
In addition
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, the locations of the shops and coatroom
was
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were
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 held on the west
side
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 of
corner
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the corner
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, and the temporary
exhibition
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museum
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 had no changes in placement. The permanent
exhibition
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 room had
became
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become
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 wider. At the final stage in the middle of
museum
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 was Fountains placed with half of outdoor area for
cafe
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in addition".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, exhibition, cafe, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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