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The two maps show how Porth
Harbour
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has changed from 2000 to today.
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, the
harbour
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is now more modern and built for tourists. A hotel and a private beach have been added, and there are more places for visitors to eat and shop. In 2000, the
harbour
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had a marina for private yachts, a dock for fishing boats, passenger ferries, two car parks, showers and toilets, a lifeboat station and a public beach. On the east
side
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there was an old castle that was not used. Today, most of these things are still there, but new buildings have appeared. Cafés and shops are now next to the marina. More showers and toilets have been built near the car parks. The biggest change is that the disused castle has been replaced by a large hotel, and a private beach has been made for hotel guests. In summary, Porth
Harbour
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has become a busy tourist place with more facilities.

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structure
Start with a short overall view of the map, then write two small parts: old things and new things.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together and to move from one point to another.
content
Give a bit more detail from both times and make a clear compare, not just a list of items.
grammar
Keep simple sentences but let some vary a little in how they are built.
language
Check the spell and the names of places.
structure
Clear opening and closing lines.
content
Good number of exact changes named (hotel, private beach, cafés).
coherence
Used time words to show change (2000, today).

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