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The bar graph below depicts the outcome of a research in UK for the year 2005 on the housing preferences by British population.

The bar graph below depicts the outcome of a research in UK for the year 2005 on the housing preferences by British population.
The provided graph compares the results of a study, conducted within the year 2005, surveying accommodation preferences of British people; specifically, inhabitants of 3 main regions:
London
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,
Oxford
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, and
Cambridge
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. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the majority of survey takers preferred flats, especially for those living in the capital.
Whereas
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 the reverse trend, being disfavored by most, can clearly be seen in the category of Terraced
houses
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. Looking more closely at the figures, over half of Londoners opted for flats, reaching nearly 60%,
while
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Oxford
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 and
Cambridge
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 recorded much lower but still significant proportions, both at around 20%. Detached
houses
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also
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 gained popularity, particularly in
Oxford
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, where roughly 35% of respondents expressed
this
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 choice, a figure nearly double that of
Cambridge
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 and
London
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. Semi-detached
houses
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 presented a more balanced pattern. Approximately one quarter of people in
Cambridge
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 and
Oxford
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 chose
this
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 option,
in contrast
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 to
London
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, where the percentage was notably lower at about 15%.
Finally
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, terraced
houses
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 were the least attractive
overall
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, drawing less than 20% across all three regions, with
Oxford
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 showing the smallest interest. In summary,
while
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 flats dominated in
London
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 and stood as the most sought-after housing type,
Oxford
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 displayed a contrasting preference for detached
houses
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,
whereas
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Cambridge
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’s choices were spread more evenly across the remaining categories.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, oxford, cambridge, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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