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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems and state which one do you think is better.

Different countries have different approaches to
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 On one hand, there is arranged
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on the other hand
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, there is love
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.Both have their own benefits , but I think that
self-marriages
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 is better
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 the straightforward communication and interactions between the partners. Countries like India and Pakistan adopt an arranged wedding approach, in which the parents find the other partner.
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 approach does have its benefits.
Marriage
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 is a big phase of life
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, it is important that the parental sides of both partners are on good terms and have given their approval for the wedding.
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 avoids any future complications between the bride and groom.
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, since parents have more experience in
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 they will tend to choose the better partner. Parents choose the partner based on other reasons apart from looks and personality, like how strong their family
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, and how respected they are .
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, there are fewer cases of breakups and divorces in arranged marriages than self.
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, some people would rather be responsible for their own actions than
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live a life that they do not fully control. Self-marriages are arranged if both bride and groom feel that they are compatible with each other. Before officially being engaged, the partners get to know each other
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, they are more natural when interacting with each other , leading to less awkwardness.
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, they are able to communicate more effectively and open up to each other , resulting in reduced levels of stress. In conclusion,
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 arranged marriages have their benefits in the long run, love marriages are more advantageous
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 the compatibility and natural interactions between the husband and wife.

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task
Task response: The essay talks about both sides and gives a final view, but it needs a stronger, clearer reason for your final choice. Add one strong point for each side and a short ending line that sums up.
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Task response: Try to keep a fair balance. Some points are vague. Give clear reasons like family shape, pressure, or happiness to show why you pick love marriage.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use linking words to connect ideas. Add phrases like 'on one hand', 'on the other hand', 'for example', 'therefore' to show how ideas fit.
language
Coherence and cohesion: Make sure each sentence flows. Keep one idea per sentence and fix spacing and punctuation errors.
strength
Two sides are shown and a clear view is given at the end.
strength
Some real examples from India and Pakistan are used to show the idea of arranged marriage.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Arranged marriage
  • Love marriage
  • Autonomy
  • Cultural compatibility
  • Family support
  • Emotional connection
  • Individual freedom
  • Life experience
  • Practical decisions
  • Social compatibility
  • Economic compatibility
  • Mutual affection
  • Unity
  • Stability
  • Wisdom
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