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The line graph shows the information for internet users as percentage of population in three countries from 1999 and 2009

The line graph shows the information for internet users as percentage of population in three countries from 1999 and 2009
The information illustrated in the graph indicates the percentage of people from
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 States, Mexico and Canada
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
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uses
Correct subject-verb agreement
use
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internet
Correct article usage
the internet
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 between 1999 and 2009. Essentially,
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 and Mexico experienced a sharp rise,
where
Correct word choice
while
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 Canada ended
the
Change preposition
with the
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 highest among the others.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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