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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps compare the Beechwood
farm
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 in 1950 and today.
Overall
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, the
farm
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 shifts from agriculture to tourism, with some facilities added and the road layout
was
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modified,
while
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 the key types of farmland,
such
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 as fruit trees, soft fruits, and vegetables, are retained. In 1950, there were three main areas for fruit trees, soft fruits, and vegetables between the track and the river. In the bottom right side, there were three buildings, including the barn, the farmhouse, and chickens. The main road was located on the top left side, and the river ran along the bottom boundary of the
farm
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. The remaining area, which was located in the top right section, was used for sheep grazing. Nowadays, the area for sheep has been removed. Half of the space is for tourism, where the parking and the camping field have been set up. The other space is for energy production, where the parking and solar panels have been built.
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, the barn building has been replaced by the holiday cottages, and the
farm
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 shop has been established on the farmland for fruit trees.

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task
Add a clear overview sentence that states the main change between 1950 and today.
task
Give precise facts from the map and avoid wrong items (for example, clarify what counts as a building).
cohesion
Use more linking words to show order and contrast (e.g., 'in addition', 'but', 'however').
grammar
Check grammar and keep the same tense when talking about both maps (e.g., use 'was' or 'is' consistently).
lexical
Use simple, exact words to name things (parking, cottages, solar panels) and keep phrasing clear.
overview
Clear overview of change from farming to tourism.
content
Some detail from the maps, like parking and cottages.
structure
Paragaps show time order (1950 then today).

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