Many nations have a minimum age limit to drink. While other think that it is a better policy if there should not be many strict laws related to drinking. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Many countries have
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law
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laws
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to limit young
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to drink
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from drinking
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. But some
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think that
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should not
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too many laws to limit alcohol consumption. In my opinion,
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matter should be viewed dialectically.
To begin
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with, A minimum drinking age helps safety and health. It reduces harm to young
people
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and lowers accidents and crime. It is easier to check at shops and bars.
However
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, not many strict laws can cause problems. Some
people
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will drink anyway, perhaps at home or in secret, making it less safe. Education and clear rules for adults may work better than hard rules for all. All in all, the government should keep a clear age rule, and the
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society
and parents must give the minors
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good education.

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task response
State your view clearly in the intro and repeat it in the conclusion. Add 1 or 2 clear examples for each side so you are balanced.
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Make a short plan and keep 4 parts: intro, side A, side B, conclusion. Use simple link words to show how ideas fit and flow well.
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The essay shows both sides of the topic.
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There are good link words like 'To begin with', 'However', and 'All in all'.
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The sentences are easy to read and ideas are clear.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age
  • drink
  • law
  • rules
  • limit
  • health
  • harm
  • young
  • people
  • safety
  • crime
  • accident
  • education
  • family
  • school
  • police
  • grown
  • culture
  • society
  • growth
  • memory
  • driving
  • road
  • risk
  • future
  • we
  • can
  • should
  • it
  • is
  • good
  • bad
  • easy
  • hard
  • clear
  • fair
  • work
  • ways
  • help
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