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Band 4.5

It will be better to have wide use of driverless cars for individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is
common
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 belief that using more
driverless
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cars
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 has lots of benefits for individuals and
society
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 in the future.
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, I firmly believe that it has some disadvantages to
use
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using
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driverless
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cars
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 widely because
driverless
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cars
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 aren’t safe enough for people and lead to
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a decline
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work
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in work
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 opportunities for
society
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.
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 with, the development of
driverless
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cars
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 still has some significant drawbacks.
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, the auto guideline system of
driverless
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cars
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 often
figures out
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some
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a
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 mistake. Leading the driver
to
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the wrong way is relatively not important. Safety is especially crucial for individuals.
Driverless
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cars
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 make the driver dangerous and even cause fatal accidents.
According to
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 recent news, a Taiwanese family went to travel
with
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in
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driverless
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cars
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. Their destination was a famous bridge on the river. When they arrived at the bridge, the car suddenly rushed into the river, and all of the family members
on
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in
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 the car died. The tragedy made people
realize
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realise
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 that the safety problem of
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cars
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 can’t be ignored. On top of that,
driverless
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cars
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 being used widely in
society
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 will make some jobs
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such
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, such
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 as taxi
drivers
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drivers,
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 be replaced. If
driverless
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cars
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 are used widely, these drivers will lose their jobs. It will make a big social issue that too many people don’t have jobs. The issue
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 in any country
that
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will considerably impact the economy of the country. Statistics have shown that there are two million taxi drivers in Taiwan. If Taiwan uses
driverless
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cars
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 widely in the future, it will dramatically raise the unemployment rate. In that time, tens of thousands
families
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of families
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 will lose their
economical
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economic
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 support, so we can’t make
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 situation happen.
To sum up
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, the safety problem and unemployment rate are two issues that can’t be ignored for both individuals and
society
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. For these reasons, having
wide use
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widely used
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driverless
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cars
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 still has too many disadvantages to operate.

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task response
You have a clear view and you show a reason. Try to show more ideas from both sides and add more proof or proof like facts or data.
coherence
Use simple tie words and small links to move ideas in a smooth flow. Make one idea in one para and put a line to start the next para.
grammar
Check your grammar and word use. Small mistakes can hide your point. Use the right words like 'economic' not 'economical' and make verb and noun agree.
content
Clear view on the topic.
coherence
Some link words show the plan of the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • sensors
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility
  • displacement
  • fuel efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • pollution control
  • ethical considerations
  • legal framework
  • data privacy
  • overreliance
  • system failures
  • connectivity
  • decision-making
  • security concerns
  • economic impact
  • maintenance
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