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Band 4

Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant laces to live and work in, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
cars
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 are
nessasary
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necessary
 for
this
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 fast life
but
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, but
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 some individuals believe that
while
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 using
the
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apply
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privet
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private
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vehicals
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vehicles
traffic
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, traffic
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 has
rise
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risen
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 in urban cities
it
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. It
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 is
diffecalt
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difficult
 to live and
work
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work,
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 so some
people
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belives
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believe
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 that
cars
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are
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should be
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 completely banned in
city
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centers
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centres
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. I partly agree
with
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that
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 limiting private
cars
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 must be
baning
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banning
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.
Firstly
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, excessive traffic makes cities unpleasant and
increased
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increases
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pollution
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. In
mega
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megacities
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cities
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cities,
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people
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 are using
car
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cars
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 for their
confort
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comfort
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while
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, while
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excess using
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excessive use
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 of private
vehicals
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vehicles
it
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apply
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has some
consequence
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consequences
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like
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, like
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 air
pollution
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 and noise
pollution
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also
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it has
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increases
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 more chances
for
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of
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 accidents.
For example
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,
In
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in
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 urban
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areas
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area
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area,
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people
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 have poor health
compair
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compared
 to the rural
area
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areas
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. In
the
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apply
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delhi
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Delhi
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air
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, air
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pollution
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are
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is
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 higher
in
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apply
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every year
and
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, and
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their
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apply
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recients
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residents
 have
problem
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problems
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to sevived
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surviving
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 in
this
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city
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.
Secondly
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,
In
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in
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city
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centers
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centres
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 banning private
cars
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 would lessen
pollution
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 and
also
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cret
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create
 safety and more
opne
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open
 streets for pedestrians and cyclists. If
people
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 are using
bus
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buses
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,
tram
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trams
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 and
subways
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subways,
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 it will
be
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apply
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genrate
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generate
 revenue for
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the govenmnet
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govenmnet
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government
 and they use
for
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it for
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in
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apply
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public
transports
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transport
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.
Childrens
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Children
 have safety on roads and
also
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 they
using
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use
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 the cycle to
trasport
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transport
 in
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city
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the city
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.
However
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,
If
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if
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car
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cars
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 are banned in
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city
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the city
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centre
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center
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center,
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 it could hurt
people
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 who need
cars
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 for work, some
are
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make
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 deliveries in
uber
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Uber
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 and
texis
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taxis
.
some time
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Sometimes
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 it has to be emergencies in
hospital
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the hospital
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they
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, they
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 need
run
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to run
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 their
vehical
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vehicle
. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 in
this
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area
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area,
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 it
shoud
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should
 be
limited
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a limited
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 zone for private
vehicals
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vehicles
 and improve public
trnasport
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transport
 so
people
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 are using
bus
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buses
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,
subway
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subways
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 or
tram
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trams
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instead
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 of
cars
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. In the
nutshall
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nutshell
,
Government
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the Government
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 should work
for
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on
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 public
tranports
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transportation
 so
people
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using
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can use
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 that and
decreased
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decrease
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 air
pollution
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.

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task response
Make your main view clear in the first paragraph and restate it at the end.
cohesion
Use simple linking words to show how ideas go together, like and, but, for example.
grammar
Check spelling and fix many small mistakes.
content
Give clear examples to back points and explain how they show your idea.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea.
content
Clear view on the topic and some reasons are given.
structure
Use of sequence words shows plan.
content
Attempts to discuss both sides of the issue.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic
  • city
  • car
  • ban
  • center
  • pollution
  • air
  • noise
  • health
  • walk
  • bike
  • bus
  • train
  • public
  • transport
  • rule
  • limit
  • zone
  • fee
  • charge
  • emergency
  • delivery
  • work
  • life
  • safe
  • safety
  • clean
  • pleasant
  • policy
  • plan
  • argue
  • agree
  • disagree
  • balance
  • practical
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • implement
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