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The two bar charts show the percentage of food and goods that were bought in supermarkets in three countries.

The two bar charts show the percentage of food and goods that were bought in supermarkets in three countries.
The two bar charts show the percentage of
food
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 and
goods
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 that were bought in
supermarkets
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 in three countries.
Overall
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, the figures increased in all three countries, but the growth was much stronger in Countries 1 and 2 than in
Country
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 3.
Supermarkets
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 became most important in
Country
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 1. In
Country
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 1, the percentage of
food
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 bought in
supermarkets
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 went up from about 10% to 40%. The rise in
goods
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 was even greater, climbing from around 20% to 60%.
This
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 made
Country
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 1 the
country
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 with the highest share of supermarket shopping. In
Country
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 2, the trend was similar but less dramatic.
Food
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 sales in
supermarkets
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 increased only slightly, from about 25% to just above 30%,
while
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goods
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 rose more clearly, from 40% to 50%.
By contrast
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,
Country
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 3 experienced very little change. Both
food
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 and
goods
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 bought in
supermarkets
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 stayed under 10% in the first period and only rose to about 10% in the
second
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second period
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods, supermarkets, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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