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Band 5.5

nowadays many cities face traffic jam what causes this what are solutions

In recent years, there has been a rising problem of
traffic
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 congestion in many large
cities
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.
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, despite the number of causes, I strongly believe that the issue can be partially solved with
infrastructure
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development
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 and management of
traffic
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 incidents. In
this
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 essay, I will analyse the causes of
traffic
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 jams and propose some potential solutions. The main cause of
traffic
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 jams in big
cities
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 is a bad
infrastructure
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. Developed
cities
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 have a
big
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high
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 level of immigration. People sick improvement in their lives improve in bigger
cities
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 , which leads to an overflow of population and
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 to
traffic
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 congestion. The hour-long
traffic
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 jam can be created by an accident that happened in the middle of the
road
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.
Accidents
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 can significantly slow down
traffic
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 on the
roads
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. There is
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 an act of rubbernecking, which
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 aggravates the situation. One possible solution would be the
development
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 of
road
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infrastructure
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. Narrow
roads
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 can't cope with the rising number of vehicles.
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,
road
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 expansion, additional lines for bicycles and buses can greatly improve
road
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traffic
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.
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, we can encourage citizens to use bicycles and scooters in warm seasons to reduce the number of vehicles on the
roads
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.
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 to
infrastructure
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development
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, to tackle the problem of
accidents
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 on the
roads
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, police officers should regulate the management of
traffic
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 incidents. Some
accidents
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 surely can take up the whole
road
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 , which substantially slows the
traffic
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 down or fully stops it. Good management is definitely able to decrease
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 challenge. In conclusion,
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 the problem of
traffic
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 jams in large
cities
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 is serious, it can be solved by the
development
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 of
road
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infrastructure
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 and the coordination of
traffic
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accidents
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.
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, hard work on improving the lives of people can fix most of the issues in the
cities
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 for sure.

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task-management
Plan your essay with a clear aim. Start with the cause, then talk on the fix.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a line that tells what the paragraph is about.
language
Be careful with word choice. Use simple words in every sentence.
content
Give more real proof or example for each point, like how a bus lane or a bike lane helps.
content
The topic is clear and you state both causes and fixes.
structure
There is a plan and closing end.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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