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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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modern society, each person
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 is travelling or working in that country. But
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 said that there are more reasons to learn a foreign
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. In my opinion, I believe that learning a foreign
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country
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communication
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people
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language
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. When we move to a new country, we must learn
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langue
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. Because when we don’t speak that foreign
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, you will not have a good experience
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 your trip. Like my uncle, he’s moved to England since 2020, and he said that “When I
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, I must have learnt English to communicate with them”. So, working or moving to another country might make us learn a new
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 hand, some individuals say that these are not the only reasons to make
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 learn a foreign
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. We can learn
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language
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 as a hobby or we can have more knowledge of the
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 of
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other countries.
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 we will have more opportunities for jobs in the future.
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, my dad is a
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secretary
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. He thought he should learn another
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 to communicate easily with his partner of his boss. When he learns new work or finds new things to learn, he finds it interesting because he can have
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knowledge of the unique
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culture
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. 5 years ago, he
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promoted a new director because he
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 a lot of
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experience
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 that work. In conclusion, learning
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language
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success. Working or travelling is not the main point
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 it’s the main
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 that we want to do
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 big problem in our life.

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structure
Make your parts clear: start each paragraph with a main idea and stay on it.
grammar
Use simple words and fix spelling and grammar to be easy to read.
content
Explain both views well, then give your own view at end.
content
Add more details for examples, with real or believable facts.
content
You show that language helps in work and travel.
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You add a personal example to show your point.
structure
You include a short conclusion that restates your view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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