the diagram below shows the process of making instant coffee.

the diagram below shows the process of making instant coffee.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the diagram below shows the process of making instant coffee.
The diagram below illustrates the manufacturing
process
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for making instant
coffee
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from
coffee
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beans
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.
Overall
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, it is a linear
process
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constisting
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consisting
six
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of six
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main processes
:
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:
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collecting, roasting, grinding, mixing, and drying, before the final product is packaged. The
process
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begin
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with
farmed
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farming
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the
coffee
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beans
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before drying them. After the
beans
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are fully dried
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, the
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the
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they
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beans
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apply
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are roasted
with
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at
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high temperature
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then
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, then
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immediately cooled
them
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rapidly using a machine.  In the next stage, the cooled
beans
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are
gound
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ground
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using
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a grounder
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grounder
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grinder
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machine with
purpose
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the purpose
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of making them into small
pices
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pieces
. Because the ground frozen
beans
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are
trun
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turned
into liquid, the frozen ground
beans
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have to
dried
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be dried
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in a
vacum
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vacuum
to
romove
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remove
the water. After the
process
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of drying the
coffee
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beans
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has
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is
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done and the products are completely dried.
Finally
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,
The
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the
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product
which
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, which
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is instant
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coffee
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coffee,
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is packed into jars and they are ready for
sell
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sale
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, coffee, beans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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