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The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table presents the main figures on the demographics of four different nations.
Overall
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, it is evident that the highest
numbers
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 of population was in
China
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, and
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USA
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the USA
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 have the most noticeable GDP among these four countries. In more detail, we can see that the highest
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numbers
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number
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 of people was in
China
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, with more than one billion. Following
was
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were
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USA
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the USA
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 and Russia, with the
figues marginaly
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figures marginally
 more than 31 million and slightly above 14 million
repectively
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respectively
.
In contrast
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,
UK
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the UK
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 saw the lowest
numbers
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 of
populaion
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population
, at only about 6.5 million.
On the other hand
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,
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USA
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the USA
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 has the dominant figures of GDP, with the number of $53,681. After that was
UK
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the UK
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, which was $41,787 in GDP and just slightly lower than
it
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that
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in
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of
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China
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. Russia and
China
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 show the lowest
numbers
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 in
this
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 table, with only $14,987 and $6,807
repectively
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respectively
.
Fianlly
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Finally
,
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 was expected to have the highest average life
period
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expectancy
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oin
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at
 81.5 years,
while
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USA
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the USA
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 has the lowest
expection
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expectation
 with only 69.2 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, china, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic metrics
  • age distribution
  • urbanization levels
  • population growth rates
  • life expectancy
  • birth rates
  • immigration policies
  • economic development
  • geographical size
  • historical factors
  • health care systems
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • proportion
  • population size
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