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Band 2

The plans below show the layout of a university's spot centre now and what it will look after redevelopment. write at least 150 word.

The given maps below illustrate the appearance of the university sports
center
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centre
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 before and after the development from
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the currently
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currently
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 to
future
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the future
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.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the interior design and
dermestic
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decoration
 of the university
sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 are totally changed and
referblised
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refurbished
.
However
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, the size of some elements
remind
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remains
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unchenged
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unchanged
,
such
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 as the pool, the
chaging
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changing
room
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, and the seating.  At present, the pool, gym, changing
room
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, seating, and reception are in the middle of
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the center
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center
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centre
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. Two
of
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apply
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outdoor courts to each of them are
one
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 to the east and
one
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 to the west.  In the future, the domestic design of the university sports centre
is
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will be
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 totally different
then
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 at the present. Two
side
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sides
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 of
outdoor
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the outdoor
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 courts, which
located
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are located
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 between the reception
area
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area,
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 have
been
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apply
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emerged
to
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as
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one
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 huge
room
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. The book
room
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 replaced
one
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 of
outdoor
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the outdoor
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 courts to the west. To the east, the
dace
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dance
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 studio
have
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has
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 been replaced the another outdoor court.
Additionally
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, lots of facilities are added, including
,
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apply
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 two extra changing rooms, the sports shop, and the cafe, which would be very functional and helpful for students.

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task
Work on task: give a full view of the map changes and say what stays the same and what changes.
coherence
Make flow: use linking words to join ideas and put ideas in clear parts.
style
Fix wording: use simple words, check spelling, and be clear about place names.
content
Add exact points: say where new rooms go and what is kept or moved.
structure
Have opening and ending: start with a short view and end with a small note.
structure
Starts with a short summary.
content
Shows change from now to then.
coherence
Gives ideas in order.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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