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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In the contemporary era,
language
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 has become a main carrier of culture and an indispensable part of life,
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 some people argue that it is the government’s duty to invest in
language
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 conservation, others contend that
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 practice is a waste of
money
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. In
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 essay, I will present reasons that lead to both views and give my own well-grounded perspectives. Supporters may find merit in the argument that the government is supposed to pay for saving these languages
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 the fact that
language
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 represents a nation’s culture. As a cultural carrier of a nation’s history,
language
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 is related to civilians’ daily lives.
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, the Māori in New Zealand, the largest group of the local people, have a strong reliance on their
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, despite English being the main
language
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 spoken.
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, local elderly pass down the history and memories to the younger generation orally,
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 they are mainly associated with wars, evolutions, and traditions.
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, based on
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, if it is replaced by other languages, its culture and historical events would be diminished gradually. So governments should bear the responsibility to invest in the preservation to maintain the existence of the
language
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. The other factor contributing to others’ views is that resources and
money
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 should be allocated to other sections of society. Stemming from the current crisis that occurs in society,
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 as climate change, limited resources, and pollution. It is publicly acknowledged that all of them are tightly related to individuals’ lives and should be
prioritized
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 before cultural contributors to human spiritual lives.
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, climate change significantly affects the environment and survival.
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, if
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 conservation accounts for a huge amount of funds, people do not have adequate
money
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 to support finding solutions to tackle the current problems. In conclusion, both the conservation of
language
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 and the environment need funding backups. The most effective solution is a joint effort and a reasonable allocation of
money
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 by the government.

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task
Say your view clearly at the start or end of the essay.
task
Add one or two strong facts or simple examples for each view.
coherence
Link ideas with clear sign posts; show how ideas fit.
coherence
Use simple connect words like and, but, because, so, then.
structure
Keep one idea in each paragraph; make a quick plan before writing.
grammar
Check grammar; fix subject-verb and articles.
strength
Shows both sides of the talk.
strength
There is a clear structure with intro, body and end.
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