Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be. What do you think are the reasons for this? What can be done to make families close?

In modern society, families have become less close to each other
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a number of reasons. I strongly believe that
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-life balance and technological advancement
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the major factors to blame. There are,
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,
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several efficient remedies to address
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tendency,
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as new
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regulation
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by governments and community activities by individuals. First and foremost reason for
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development might be overloaded
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which
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almost every citizen
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facing today. As working
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environments
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are getting more and more competitive, employers
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from
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their employees
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be
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hours available,
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demonstrate perfect results.
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imposing individuals
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are forced to
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extremely hard and achieve tasks under unrealistic deadlines, in order
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their position at their workplace.
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, people are likely experiencing a huge burnout and would not find enough
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to spend with their
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family
members.
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, in
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technology-focused world, everyone,
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young generations,
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mostly engaged with their electronic devices
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of spending their leisure
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with their
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ones.
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, they have become isolated from their relatives
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worsening
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relations and family bonds. Fortunately, there are measures to tackle
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problem and
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can be
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on both at governmental and
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an
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individual level. At
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the governmental
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level, one
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workable
method is introducing
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regulation
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on reducing long
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hours or even
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, which will significantly mitigate the
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on professional matters.
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would make
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for individuals to find adequate
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being engage with their families and relatives,
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which I mean would positively impact their
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relationships
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. On an individual level, people and neighbours should try to
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community activities or events, which would gather all family members and enjoy their leisure
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.
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would likely
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encourage them to interact more with one another. In conclusion, it seems to appear that in
todays fast
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today's
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world, long
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hours and technological developments are worsening the family relations.
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, with the
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regulations
introduced by governments and with community
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this
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problem could
be
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probably lessen the
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effects
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of
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issue.

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