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The graph below shows people's level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007

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The graph below shows people's level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007
The given line chart illustrates the comparison of the
level
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 of
satisfaction
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 with the health care
system
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 of people in four countries
Canada
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, Canada
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, the UK, the Netherlands and the US
between
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, between
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 1991 and 2007
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, as can be clearly seen from the graph, there were significant changes in the
level
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 of
satisfaction
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 of people in these countries with the
healthcare
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system
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. The
level
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 of
satisfaction
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 with the
healthcare
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system
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 in the UK and
US
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the US
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 tends to rise,
while
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 the opposite trend was true in Canada and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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. In Canada, there was
significant
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a significant
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 fluctuation
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. In
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1991
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1991,
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 the figure stood at around 60% and over the following 7 years, the data of the
healthcare
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system
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 plummeted sharply
around
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 20% by 1998
, and the
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healthcare
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system
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 experienced a moderate increase from 20 to 40
percent
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per cent
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 from 1998 to 2007. In the Netherlands, it can be seen from the chart that there was a slight drop from approximately 49% in 1991 to 47% in 2007. The figures in the UK show that the
level
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 of
satisfaction
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 with the
healthcare
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system
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 tended to rise over a period of 16 years
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 21% in 1991 and increased steadily to around 29% in 2007. Meanwhile, the figure for the US increased slightly from approximately 10% to 11% over the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, satisfaction, system, healthcare with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • satisfaction level
  • comparative analysis
  • steady increase/decrease
  • fluctuation
  • health policy
  • government spending
  • global health crisis
  • public health initiatives
  • perception
  • speculation
  • historical data
  • implications
  • trends
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