The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of four different age
groups
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of movie
theaters
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theatres
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in a certain country between 1979 and 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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all the
groups
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had similar trends from 1979 to 2008. Obviously, the youngest
people
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were the primary group attending the cinema. Ages 25-34
was
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the second highest percentage of visitors in the
theater
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theatre
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. Followed by 35 to 49 and 50 years old were the
less
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smallest
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amount
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number
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to go to participate than other
groups
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. From 1978 to 1988, the ratio of
people
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who in the four stages visited movie theaters dropped drastically, around 15% to 20%. Over the next decade, all of the
groups
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increased noticeably,
such
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as the elderly
people
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grew from 20% to 40%, and 35-49 year old
people
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increased
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by more than
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20%.
By contrast
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, the
middle age
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middle-aged
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people
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climbed slightly, reaching 70% in 1998. Before 2003, the whole age
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groups
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group
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remained relatively stable.
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, in the final five years, all the ages declined steadily, except for the oldest
people
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. In 2008, the teenagers played a dominant role in attending leisure activities, at 82%.
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, both 35-49 years old and elderly
people
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were
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in the
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same proportion, with 50%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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