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The map shows the change of a village called Chorleywood between 1868 and 1994.

The map shows the change of a village called Chorleywood between 1868 and 1994.
The
map
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 illustrates the changes that happened in Chorleywood
village
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 from 1868 to 1994.
Overall
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, the
village
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area
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 had become large across the
map
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 over the period,
together with
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 the development of transportation infrastructure (main
road
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,
motorway
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 and
railway
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). In the early stage (1868-1883), there were Chorleywood Park and
Golf
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the Golf
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 course in the centre of the
map
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, and the small
village
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area
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 was only to the west of
this
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 entertainment facility by the main
road
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. Gradually, the
village
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area
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 had been expanded to the east along the side of the main
road
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 until 1922. As the new
railway
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 system (from west to east) with the station was introduced to the villagers in 1909, people had
also
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 begun to live alongside the
railway
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, and the
area
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 of Chorleywood had enlarged by 1970.
Due to
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 the 1970 construction of
new
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a new
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motorway
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 which crossed the
map
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 from north to south, a lot of new
village
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 areas had appeared around the roundabout of the
road
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 and
motorway
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 and the south-east of the
map
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 where the
motorway
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 passed over the
railway
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, village, area, road, motorway, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • recreational areas
  • conservation efforts
  • commercial areas
  • technological advancements
  • demographic shifts
  • preservation
  • historical buildings
  • evolution
  • residential areas
  • public services
  • economic changes
  • green spaces
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