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Band 2

The plan below shows the village of Pebbleton 20 years ago and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate the main changes which have taken
in
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place in
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the
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Pebbleton between 20 years ago and today.
Overall
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, what stands out from the maps is that Pebbleton has become more residential and comfortable
with
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, with
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 more facilities and
houses
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. As the maps show, there were no
change
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changes
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 with
school
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the school
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 which is located in the
south
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southern
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 part.
Also
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, the lighthouse
which
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, which
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 is situated
in
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west-north
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the west-north
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side
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side,
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 did not
experienced
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experience
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 any alteration.
Similarly
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, with
lighthouse lane
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Lighthouse Lane
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,
old ford road
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Old Ford Road
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,
playing
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the playing
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 field and
road
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the road
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 bridge When it comes to
transformations
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transformations,
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 were a lot.
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, twenty years ago, there was a film studio which is
returned
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converted
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 into flats. The old
word
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world
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 near the lighthouse has been converted into
children’s
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a children’s
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 playground. Next to it,
community
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a community
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center
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centre
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 has been constructed. Under it, the tennis court
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also
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has also
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have
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been built. Another change was
houses
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 beside the sea
,
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;
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 there were 4
houses
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, but now the number of
houses
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almost
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has almost
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 doubled
with
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to
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 7
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apply
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houses
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.

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grammar
Fix big grammar errors and make the sense clear. Use the small, simple form of words.
structure
Split the plan into clear parts: what stays the same, what changes, then finish with a short view.
clarity
Use the same tense for talking about past and now, like 'twenty years ago' and 'now'.
vocabulary
Choose simple, exact word for map talk, e.g. 'turned into flats' instead of 'returned into flats'.
cohesion
Link ideas with little words like 'first', 'then', 'also', 'but' to help flow.
content
The essay shows a main idea of change and a few clear examples.
structure
There is an overall view at the start.
examples
The writer notes some exact changes like new play area and more houses.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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