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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the number of
films
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 produced by five
countries
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 in 2007, 2008 and 2009.
Overall
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,
Country
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 A was consistently the largest producer,
while
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Country
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E
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 made the fewest
films
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. Most
countries
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 showed either a steady rise or modest growth over the three-year period, with the exception of a slight decline in
Country
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 A. In 2007 and 2008,
Country
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 A led the rankings with roughly 90
films
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 each year, before a small drop to around 80 in 2009.
Country
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 B followed at a much lower level, producing about 50
films
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 in both 2007 and 2008, but experiencing a sharp increase to nearly 70 by 2009. Production in
Country
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 C, though far lower,
also
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 climbed steadily from around 10
films
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 in 2007 to almost 20 two years later.
Countries
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 D and
E
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 remained the smallest contributors.
Country
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 D produced approximately 15
films
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 in 2007, slightly more than
E
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, and rose marginally to around 18 in 2009.
Country
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E
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 stayed relatively stable at about 10
films
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 throughout the period. In summary,
while
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 the
overall
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 hierarchy of producers remained unchanged,
Countries
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 B and C recorded the most notable growth, narrowing the gap slightly with the dominant
Country
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 A.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, countries, country, e with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Film production
  • Trends
  • Consistently
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Patterns
  • Increased/Decreased
  • Analyzed
  • Anomalies
  • Industry changes
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural aspects
  • Collectively
  • Overall trend
  • Reported
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