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Writing Samples
Band 3

The central government, the city government and individuals should all be responsible for protecting the environment. Do you agree or disagree

It is a debate whether
should
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public authorities and individuals
both
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should both
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 take responsibility
of
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 devoting to the environment or not. From my point of view, I
reokon
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reckon
 that everyone on Earth is in charge of maintaining our planet. First and foremost, subtle
neligible
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negligent
 habits
ton
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definitely contribute to negative impacts, which
evitably
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 accumulate
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 a fast
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,
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form
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 a vicious cycle. It is not acceptable to overlook
the
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any subtle waste that causes harm to the environment. To illustrate, the use of plastic bags increases
signifacantly
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significantly
 nowadays, posing
threat
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 to marine
lives
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life
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.
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 is not caused by an individual, but
individuals
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.
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, it is a huge amount of electricity generated attributed to a person, families, and countries. It leads to
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 a waste if people
are
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lack
of
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awareness. There's no denying that the government are responsible for the situation, but not all people should
not
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take it for granted. From my perspective,
organizing
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 groups to call for the
goverment
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government
for
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to establish restrictions and regulations is a collaborative way to conquer circumstances. Not only
the government should
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should the government
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intensity
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 punishment to avoid waste and selfish acts,
citizens
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but citizens
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 should
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 pay attention to their life habits. In
this
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 way, a win-win
way
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situation is founded.
To sum up
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, it is vital that people and the government
should
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work together to develop a better world.

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organization
Make a clear plan before you start. Have one main idea in each paragraph and put your view in the first line of the essay.
grammar
Use easy and correct grammar. Check your spellings and fix wrong words so the meaning is clear.
coherence
Link ideas well with short links. Use words like also, but, so, and for this reason.
content
Give a real example and explain it in one line to back an idea.
content
You show the view that both government and people must act.
structure
The essay ends with a simple sum up.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shared responsibility
  • enact
  • enforce
  • allocate
  • environmental laws
  • pollution control
  • recycling programs
  • waste management
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly practices
  • sustainable
  • comprehensive
  • public awareness campaigns
  • global warming
  • concerted efforts
  • biodiversity
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