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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the
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 provided line chart illustrates the comparison of how
much
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many
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 students from the US, the UK, and Australia who joined
in
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colleges in
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college
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apply
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other countries over a period of 5 years
between
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, between
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 2002 and 2007.
Overall
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, it is
apparently
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 that there were significant changes in data participating in numerous courses. It can be seen
from
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that
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 the level of
the
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apply
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statistic
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statistics
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 in the US tends to hold the highest position during 5 consecutive years.
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, the UK started going down considerably
while
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 the rest of
country
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the country
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 stays stable annually. In the US, there was a moderate decline between 2002 to
2004
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2004,
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 around 330 to over 349 units
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then
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, then
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grow
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grew
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 rapidly in the next 3 years. In terms of the UK, during the period from 2002 to 2004, the
digits
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number
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 of
collegians taken
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college students taking
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 part in
the
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apply
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higher education
institution
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institutions
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are
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is
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 inclined to drop gradually
around
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by around
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 10% before falling sharply until 2007.
On the other hand
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, Australia's data are always balanced and unchanged from the period in question.

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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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