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The given line graph illustrates the number of students from the US, the UK and Australia who studied in universities in other countries over a 5-year period between 2002 and 2007.

The given line graph illustrates the number of students from the US, the UK and Australia who studied in universities in other countries over a 5-year period between 2002 and 2007.
The given line graph illustrates the number of
students
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 from the US, the UK and Australia who studied in universities in other countries over a 5-year period between 2002 and 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen
the
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that the
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 number of
students
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 in the US experienced a
went up
Verb problem
apply
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slightly
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slight
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trend
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upward trend
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. By
contract
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contrast
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, the figures of the
students
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 in the UK experienced a plunged quickly over a 5-year period,
while
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 the opposite trend is true in
the
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apply
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Australia remained
constantly
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constant
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. In the United States, the
students
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 showed only a mild
went down
Wrong verb form
downward
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 trend at the beginning, before rising gradually from 48000 in 2004 of the period to 50000 in 2007. In
term
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terms
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 of the UK, the number of
students
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the
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and the
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 proportion remained
unchange
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unchanged
 at around 30000 between 2000 and 2003
,
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;
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however
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,
this
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 figure
decline
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declined
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 steadily to about 21000 in 2007.
Besides
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,
the
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apply
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Australia
was
Verb problem
apply
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observed
the
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that the
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 proportion remained relatively stable
by
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at
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 around 10000 between 2002 and 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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