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Writing Samples
Band 2

In some countries it is illegal to stop people applying for a job because of their age. Is this a positive or a negative development?

it
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It
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 is a
possitive
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positive
 development.The rule makes hiring fair by not using
age
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,it will benefit to economy and society,and sometimes it will
bings
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bring
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 some
problem
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problems
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 that we should solve
it
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apply
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and make the world better. If
rule
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the rule
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allow
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allows
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 hiring not using
age
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,it means that it can give more
chance
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chances
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 to everyone to work,including older
workers
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 who have
skill
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skills
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 and young people who are new to work to get more experience.So everyone can find
job
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a job
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,can earn money by their self.
On the other hand
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,it will improve the society and economy.More
workers
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 mean more goods and services,for older
workers
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 they can bring experience and steadiness,
while
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 younger
workers
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 may bring more new ideas,so a mix can
helps
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help
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 a company grow. Maybe it brings some
problem
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problems
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,
for example
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,some employers may try to guess
age
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 in a hidden way or ask about
age
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.And we should deal with the matter about
this
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,making rules and checking to stop
this
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,
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otherwise
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,training
fo
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for
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 HR and clear reporting
helps
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help
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 enforce the law. In a word,the change is good if rules are clear and well enforced,it will
protects
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protect
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 rights and
helps
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help
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 the job market,
thoug
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though
 learning to put policy into practice takes effort.

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task response
Be clear on your view at the start and keep it in mind as you add each point.
coherence
Put your ideas in separate paragraphs. One main idea per paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go together (for example: also, but, then).
content
Give one or two clear examples for each main idea.
language
Check spelling and fix easy errors in grammar and word use (for example: possessives, punctuation).
structure
Finish with a short, strong conclusion that restates your view.
content
The essay shows fair use of the age rule as a good idea.
structure
The writer tries to show both sides and give a view.
language
The word choice is easy to read and not too hard for the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age
  • job
  • work
  • hire
  • fair
  • unfair
  • equal
  • chance
  • people
  • law
  • rule
  • old
  • young
  • skill
  • experience
  • company
  • boss
  • help
  • harm
  • grow
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