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Band 4.5

Open plan office no walls no barriers. Do the disadvantages of open–plan offices outweigh the advantage?

Most people nowadays prefer offices which are without any physical divisions. In my
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this
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 style is cost-effective and affordable. But as everything has its own drawbacks ,
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 of downsides
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 it.
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 essay. In
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modernized
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 era, the layout of the offices is
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 changing
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 the developed world. There are a number of different benefits of the open-plan layout.
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 journalists, the a demand for workplaces which are without walls. The main factor is
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 design is cost-reducing. The expenditure for construction is way cheaper than ordinary organisations.
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, the management would be much easier for the executives. As long as every staff member
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 in the same place, managing them or giving them a particular task would be straightforward. Another improvement is enhancing the collaboration of the workers. Cooperation plays a crucial role
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 the development of the company. Uniting with co-workers creates a lot of opportunities for them to accomplish
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 significant task in a short time rather than working alone.
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 workers gathered
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 room, the noise would be a
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 problem in the workspace. Every staff
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 level is different , and
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 their working time. Sometimes it would be
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 for the executives to manage them. Absenteeism would reach
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 higher peak, the employees may consider that their boss cannot notice them unless them will come at all.
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 drastically issue is the bother each other. It definitely affects the concentration directly. Maybe
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 staff is ought to make a call immediately
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 to
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 relatives or
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 work. It is extremely annoying whenever people cannot dive into the jobs
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. In conclusion, it is an efficient method to improve the productivity of the staff by structuring an open-plan layout.
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, it creates a disorder and much more noise
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distraction
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task response
State a clear view in your intro and final sentence to show your stance.
coherence
Use a simple plan: one idea per paragraph; use linking words to flow.
language
Use easy words and fix wrong word use. Check grammar and spelling.
structure
Each paragraph should have a main idea and connect to the next with a link.
content
Give real examples or better details to back points.
content
The essay tries to show both good and bad points.
structure
There is a plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
linking
Some good links between ideas are used.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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