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Band 4

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships poeple make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

these
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These
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 days
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, the
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 way
people
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 interact with
eachother
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each other
 has changed because of technology
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. People
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people
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 now meet more online and keep in touch with
people
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 far away
social
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Social
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 media like
facebook
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Facebook
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 and
instagram
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Instagram
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 make contact easy and quick for families who live far away,
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 dating apps and online forums help
people
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 meet new friends
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task response
Add a clear view on the topic and end with a short conclusion.
coherence
Make one main idea per paragraph and add a small example to back it up.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go with each other.
grammar
Check spelling and sentence form so the writing is correct.
growth
Write a bit more to show more thoughts and details.
content
The idea that technology changes how people meet is clear.
structure
Text stays on topic and uses simple moves to link ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • relationship
  • technology
  • online
  • offline
  • contact
  • communication
  • connect
  • reach
  • family
  • friends
  • dating
  • apps
  • privacy
  • bullying
  • support
  • distance
  • long-distance
  • face-to-face
  • trust
  • misunderstanding
  • tone
  • nonverbal
  • depth
  • quality
  • positive
  • negative
  • balance
  • network
  • community
  • group
  • interaction
  • mobile
  • mobility
  • information
  • care
  • share
  • together
  • engine
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