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Band 4

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

IT IS INDISPUTABLE THAT ONE OF THE
PEOPLE
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PEOPLE'S
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 RIGHTS IS
OWNUNG
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OWNING
 A CLEAN
WATER
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 SUPPLY.
WHILE
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 IT IS GENERALLY CONSIDERED THAT EVERY HOUSE SHOULD HAVE
A
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apply
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FREE CHARGED
WATER
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 RESOURCES. FROM MY PERSPECTIVE, I DISAGREE.
INITIALLY
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, THE
WATER
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 COMPANIES
NEEDS
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NEED
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 TO BE SUPPORTED WITH
A MONEY
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FINANCIAL
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 RESOURCES.
IN OTHER WORDS
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, THE COMPANY
WHO
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THAT
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 IS PROVIDING THE
WATER
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 IS RUNNING JUST LIKE ANY OTHER
COMPANIES
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COMPANY
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 IN THE
WORLD
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WORLD.
,
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 PEOPLE
NEEDS
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NEED
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 TO PAY FOR IT SO IT COULD KEEP WORKING
ON
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TO
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 GIVE US THE CLEAN
WATER
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.
FURTHERMORE
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, AS LONG AS HUMAN KNOWS THAT
WATER
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 IS NOT
FREE
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FREE,
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 THEY CANNOT WASTE IT.
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, A FATHER WITH A LIMITED SALARY WHO IS PAYING FOR THE
WATER
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 BILL EVERY MONTH, WHEN HE SEES HIS LITTLE DAUGHTER PLAYING WITH
WATER
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 AND SPILL IT EVERY WHERE, HE WILL WARN HER TO STOP PLAYING WITH IT BECAUSE THE BILL WILL CAME OUT EXPENSIVE.
THIS
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 IS A WAY TO MAINTAIN THE AMOUNT OF
WATER
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 WE SHOULD NOT WASTE. ANOTHER IMPORTANT ASPECT IS THAT FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, I THINK THAT THERE IS A POSITIVE SIDE OF FREE CHARGED
WATER
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,
THAT IS
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 TO SAY, PEOPLE WITH NO
SALARY
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SALARY,
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 THEY WILL BE ABLE TO PROVIDE A CLEAN
WATER
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 TO USE OR DRINK.
FOR INSTANCE
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, FAMILIES WITH A LOT OF MEMBERS
SPESFICIALY
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, SPESFICIALY
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 WITH YOUNG MEMBERS WHO CANNOT PAY FOR SOME OF THEIR OWN NEEDS, IT WILL BE EXAUSTING FOR THE HEAD OF THE FAMILY TO PAY FOR A LOT OF THINGS FOR THE FAMILY
ESPECIALLY
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, ESPECIALLY
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 WITH
LIMITED
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a LIMITED
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 SALARY. IN SUMMARY, DESPITE DIFFERING VIEW POINTS, I DISAGREE WITH THE IDEA OF FREE CHARGED
WATER
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, BUT IT
ALSO
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 HAS A POSITIVE SIDE.

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weakness
Your view is clear, but you did not give enough proof for it.
tip
Make a short plan: say your view, add 2 reasons with one or two small examples, then finish.
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Fix grammar and spelling and use common words.
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Use simple linking words to show order and examples, like first, then, also, for example.
strength
You show a clear view on the topic.
strength
You use a real world example (water bill) to explain your point.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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