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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the citizens from various countries who were birth in
Australia
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 and the places where they live . The total population in
Australia
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 is 73% where the largest number lives in the centre, with the number of 83% and the rest live in rural areas, where the percentage is 17%. Second place is the Netherlands , with 14% who give births in
Australia
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 , and 90% of them live in metropolises.
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, the next ranking is the UK with a total of 7% and some of them stay in urban centres with 89%.
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, the rest of the country is China, New Zealand and others with a total of 6% who have labour in
Australia
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.
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, a lot of people choose to live in a metropolis with an average of approximately 85%
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 to the data shown in the pie chart,
Australia
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 has many races with many different countries represented in
Australia
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 and spread across the capital and rural areas

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