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You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter, say who are you give details about the accident suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my concern after getting injured at your supermarket
last
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monday
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. My name is Jackson; I have been a regular
satistfied coustmer
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satisfied customer
 of your store, I always do groceries from your shop, and I
never
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have never
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 had my dissatisfying experience with your company.
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,
this
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 time I was hurt
while
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 doing my shopping at your premises.
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monday
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Monday
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, I wanted to purchase something from the dairy section. Upon reaching, I had to
stopped
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 as employees
where
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were
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 doing
there
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their
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 necessary stocking of milk and other dairy products. Nearly after 10
mintues
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minutes
when
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, when
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 I came back to get milk
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, the
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 whole
crates
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crate
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 fell on my foot , leaving it
burised
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bruised
.
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 the first aid team immediately responded to the incident, I was still
bed ridden
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 for two days.
Regardless to
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 say,
customers
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customers'
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 and
employees
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employees'
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 health and safety should be a top priority for a company.
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, a regular safety inspection should be done by the management and call on any risky action, to avoid any major loss
to
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 life. I hope you
would
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 look into
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 matter urgently and provide
safe
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 surrounding for consumers. Kind regards, Jackson Smith

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Write one main idea in each paragraph and fix big spelling errors.
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Make the rest of the letter clear: state who you are, what happened, how it affected you, and what you want.
form
There is a polite start and end.
content
You tell when and what happened in the store.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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