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Band 4

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. other argue that it is better to try an improve such situations. dicusse both this views and give your own opinion.

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people
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 on the word accept a bad situation in your
life
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 with your sad job or yourself feel bad for anything situation, but it is
importan
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people
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 think
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 if a professional have a good job but he don't have free time or different idea when
people
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 spend a lot time in your hobbies or family but don't hace work or
this
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 one pay less, in bouth direction it is
importan
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 understand what it better.
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importan
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important
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life
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,
becouse
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because
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to grow
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up
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in many
abilitys
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abilities
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instance
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 some
people
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is
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are
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 happy when
play
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playing
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an intrument
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intrument
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instrument
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draw
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drawing
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beatiful
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beautiful
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preffer
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prefer
travel
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travelling
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on
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around
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e.t.c
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apply
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,
in
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this
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this
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, this
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life
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it's
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is
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because
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you do like.
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However
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 many
people
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 have a family and need
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 every day for that
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life
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life,
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 it is
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importan
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important
see
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to see
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happy
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 and your parents or
anypeople
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anyone
,
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instance
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instance,
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 when
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your
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you
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jobs
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apply
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have a bad boss or
bad
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a bad
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 salary
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, this
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this
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these
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people
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people's
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have
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 in your
familly
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family
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This
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people
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other
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a different
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 opinion from your
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 and sometimes think what is your way
but
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, but
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every
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they
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 time have a
other
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different
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motivativation
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motivation
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conclusion
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conclution,
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 when you have a bad job or
sad
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a sad
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life
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,
need
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you need
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remember
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to remember
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what
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that
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is
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this is
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this
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 the most important happy with that,
becouse
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because
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opinion
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opinion,
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i
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I
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had
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have
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 had
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differents
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position
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taht
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that
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now
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 is the most important your
tranquility
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tranquillity
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 in your
life
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, yourself
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 is the best
proyect
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project
and
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, and
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 when other
people
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from
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help you you can give
hand
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a hand
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planning
Plan before you write. Make a small plan with the main idea for each part and a clear opinion.
structure
Use clear paragraphs. Put one idea in each paragraph and use simple links to move to the next idea.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show order and view, such as first, also, but, however.
accuracy
Check your spelling and grammar. Fix easy errors like 'importan' or 'becouse'.
content
The essay tries to talk about both views and share a personal view.
content
It shows a balance idea about life and work.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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