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Many countries are experiencing a decline in traditional arts and crafts as mass-produced goods become more affordable and accessible. Should governments financially support these traditional skills, even if they are not economically viable? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

In the contemporary century,
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 demand for traditional artistic items has diminished, individuals tend to utilise
goods
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 at a reasonable price.
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 governments should support traditional skills and move them forward to adapt their products to societal demands,
this
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 may not be completely right for every business, especially those that are viable. On the one hand, the trading of
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 at affordable prices has increasingly grown, mainly because of financial barriers; many
people
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 in underdeveloped areas can't afford to purchase unique and traditional artistic crafts.
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, many traditional products,
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 as local garments, are not fashionable and trendy for city lifestyles.
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, many provinces of Iran have their exclusive clothes, which tourists often buy just once, since they cannot wear them in their daily life. In order to increase local crafts, some measures should be taken by governments.
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, these traditional
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 should be tax-free, both for customers and sellers.
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, they can consider funding the promotion and advertising of these items through social media to attract social attention.
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, they can use influencers to encourage
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 to support traditional crafts. Eventually, authorities should provide educational opportunities for craft producers to modernise their products
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 trends; in
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 case, many
people
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 will find great interest in old-world wares.
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, one
the
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 Iranian clothing brands
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 a touch of traditional art in their garments, and they have impressively increased their sales. In conclusion,
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goods
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 produced at a reasonable cost have more popularity among
people
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, traditional arts can take part in
people
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's lives by governments taking efficient actions.

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task response
Make your main view clear in the opening and keep it in all parts.
flow of ideas
Make each paragraph have one main idea and use links to the next idea.
style
Use short, plain words and small sentences to keep the point strong.
content
Give more detail on how the rules help crafts and why some firms may still not work.
task response
You show a clear view that the government can help.
flow of ideas
You use linking words to show steps and flow.
content
You give a real example from Iran to push your point.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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