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In many workplaces, online communication is now more common than face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

In many
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organizations
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organizations,
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 they are now preferring
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 mode of communication and are convening more online meetings than the conventional ones. I believe there are significant benefits to having online engagements, with only a few minor drawbacks. Online meetings have numerous advantages
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workplaces
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 gained a lot of traction.
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 is because it is very convenient and saves a lot of time
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 many
people
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 don't have today. When organisations hold their meeting, they record close to 100%
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 because
people
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 can easily log in to the meetings wherever they are and can participate.
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,
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 is considered to save time and resources that could be spent in convening and assembling
people
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 to a physical meeting.
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its drawbacks as well,
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 breaches the concept of teamwork
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it
isolates
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people
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 in their individualised spaces. It
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 limits the
organisations
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organisation's
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 culture of physical human interaction
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people
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 can read body language, emotions or simply appreciate sharing spaces.
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,
people
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 who work remotely may battle with technology breakdown
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 could slow down their work and
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 affect productivity and results. In conclusion, online communication has brought numerous gains to the
workplaces
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workplace
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 as it is convenient, saves time and resources. Admittedly,
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also
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 has its downside
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 should not be ignored.

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task response
Start with a clear view in the first line. State your point, then give reasons and a short example.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have a clear topic sentence. Use simple links to show how ideas go from one point to the next.
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The essay shows a clear view that online work has more good than bad.
coherence and cohesion
Linking phrases like On the other hand and In conclusion help the flow.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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