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The chart below shows the e expenditure of two countries consumer goods in 2010. (Pounds sterling)

The chart below shows the e expenditure of two countries consumer goods in 2010. (Pounds sterling)
Here is a chart
shows
Wrong verb form
showing
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 the consumption of
goods
Use synonyms
 for
a
Correct article usage
the
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Country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
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 which is France and
Correct article usage
the Uk
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Uk
Use the right word
UK
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at
Change preposition
in
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 2010.
the
Fix capitalization
The
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 chart contains some of
Use synonyms
goods
Correct article usage
the goods
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 , let us see how they spent
there
Use the right word
their
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 money on those
goods
Use synonyms
 based on pounds sterling . First
;
Punctuation problem
,
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 here we can see that the
Uk
Use the right word
UK
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 spent most of
there
Use the right word
their
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 money on Cars , the chart
presented
Wrong verb form
presents
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 high consumption by
Uk
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UK
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 people
on
Change preposition
of
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 all
of
Change preposition
apply
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Use synonyms
goods
Punctuation problem
goods,
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Linking Words
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is more costly than
France
Change preposition
in France
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 ,
they
Rephrase
where they
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 pay less for
non important
Correct word choice
non-essential
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goods
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 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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