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Band 4.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Future dwellers will rely on
outo
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autonomous
 drive vehicles for
their
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all land commuting and
travels
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travel
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. I believe
this
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 development that supports shifting from being engaged with driving to
another
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other
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benefitial
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beneficial
 activities
have
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has
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 vast
adventages
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advantages
 which indeed
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overwaight
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outweigh
 its negative side effects. Driving in crowded streets and
stuck
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being stuck
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 in
traffic
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a traffic
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 jam is an unavoidable
parts
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 of commuting in cities
which
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, which
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 results in a
bounch
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bunch
 of irritating problems. As the first and most important
advantages
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advantage
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 of
ommiting
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omitting
 driving by
driveless
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driverless
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 means, supporting
individuals
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individuals'
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healthiness
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health
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 can be mentioned. Driving in traffic jams is
accossiated
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associated
 with reacting to unpredictable and out of our control situations that
triggers
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trigger
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 stress hormones like cortisol and adrenaline, raising heart rate and tension. As
an
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evidence, A UK study found that commuters with long driving
period
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periods
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 reported higher stress and lower productivity than those with shorter or no commutes. Turning to
second
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the second
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 positive
consiquences
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consequences
 of
ommiting
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omitting
 driving in modern cities, saving
the
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time
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 can be mentioned.
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 more than three
houres
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hours
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 of Tehran dwellers' daily
time
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 are wasted by being engaged with driving for commuting, they can invest
this
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 invaluable
time
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 in doing other activities for their professions or learning
some thing
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something
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 new about their occupations.
This
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 is a
time
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 investment since we talk about more than 6
milion
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million
 workforces in Tehran and around 18
milion
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million
 hours per day. In conclusion,
futuristic
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a futuristic
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 point of view in regard to commuting with driverless means should be interpreted as a
briliant
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brilliant
 development which supports
dwellers
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dwellers'
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healthyness
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healthiness
 and productivity and
also
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bring
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brings
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surprising
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surprisingly
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high-yeiling
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high-yielding
 work
time
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on
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 the business tables.

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content
Make your view clear at the start and say if the good points outweigh the bad points. Then explain with small details.
content
Add more balance by mentioning some disadvantages and why they might be less important or how they can be solved.
coherence
Use a clear topic sentence in each paragraph and keep one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like also, but, however, because, and then to show how ideas connect.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use common words and short sentences to be clear.
content
Give more real examples or numbers to back up your points.
content
Clear aim to show driverless cars may help health and time saving.
support
Uses examples from a UK study and Tehran numbers.
structure
Has a plan with introduction, body and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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