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The pie charts give information about the world’s forest in five different regions and percentage of timber in each region. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts give information about the world’s forest in five different regions and percentage of timber in each region. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of
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world's
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the world's
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 forests in five distinct areas (South
America
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 ,
Africa
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 ,
Asia
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 , Europe and North
America
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) and the percentage of
timber
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 in each continent of the
world
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.
Overall
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,
Africa
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 and North
America
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 account for about half of
all
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the
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world
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's forests,
while
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 the least is
Asia
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.
In contrast
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, North
America
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 and
Africa
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 contribute about half of the global
timber
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,
whereas
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Africa
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 has the lowest amount of
timber
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. Surprisingly, despite being small in
its
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size,
Asia
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 contributes a significant proportion of the
world
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's
timber
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. Looking first of all at North
America
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 and
Africa
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, the former continent represents 25% of the
world
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’s
forest
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 and the latter 27%. In terms of
timber
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, the figure is slightly high for North
America
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 (30%) and drastically lower for
Africa
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 (9%).
Forest
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 and
timber
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 ratios are more even in other regions. European nations contain 18 % of the
world
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’s
forest
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 and produce 20% of its
timber
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.
Furthermore
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 , South
America
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 is marginally lower at 16% for
forest
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 and moderately higher at 23% for
timber
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 .
Finally
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 ,
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Asia
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Asia's
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 forests constitute 14% of the global total and 18% of all
timber
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words world, america, africa, asia, timber, forest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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