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Advertisement of snacks and toys have a great impact on children and their parents so,the advetismets to children should be banned.do you agree or disagree?

The hypothesis aimed to reveal how β2AR and its Gs protein move through shifting
confirmations
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conformations
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. As the authors put it,” we sought to
visualize
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 by cryo-EM the transition of conformational ensembles”. Their
rational
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rationale
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 was to bridge a
gab
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gap
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 in structural studies and,
above all
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, to capture fleeting intermediates along
this
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 pathway. They argued that
such
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 insight could guide more rational pharmacology, “To outline the conformational landscape, to understand G–
protein
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 selectivity and evaluate the effects of drugs with distinct efficacies and potencies
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they say.

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task
Give your view on the topic and answer the task. Right now the text mainly repeats what scientists say and does not show your own view.
structure
Use 2 or 3 short paragraphs. Start with a clear idea, then give reasons, then end with a short end.
structure
Add a short ending that says what you think.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like also, but, so to help the flow.
lexical
Use simple words. Avoid many hard words and long phrases.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. For example, use rationale, not rational; gap, not gab.
content
Give a clear example that backs up each main idea.
content
The aim to explain a science idea is clear.
evidence
Quotes show what the scientists say.
style
The tone stays formal most of the time.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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