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In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out of work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parent’s absence.

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 showcase for the orthogonal combination of time-resolved cryo-EM and MD simulations

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task response
When you write, show your main point at once. A short plan at the start and a clear wrap up at the end help the reader follow your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Ideas should fit in a clear order. Use simple links like first, next, and finally to show how ideas connect.
grammar and structure
Break long sentences into two. Use full stops to show ends. This helps avoid hard read.
lexical resource
Choose simple words. If you need a hard word, add a short explain after it. This keeps the text easy to read.
content specifics
Give one or two exact examples to back a main point. This makes the work strong and clear.
strength
The ending links well with the idea of change in the findings.
strength
There is a strong use of science terms that show good topic knowledge.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income
  • money
  • work
  • job
  • parent
  • mother
  • father
  • child
  • kids
  • family
  • home
  • care
  • look after
  • babysitter
  • daycare
  • nursery
  • school
  • education
  • time
  • support
  • bond
  • routine
  • balance
  • flexible hours
  • part-time
  • full-time
  • stress
  • happy
  • safe
  • plan
  • future
  • responsibility
  • grandparents
  • relatives
  • after-school
  • club
  • supervise
  • safety
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