“Some people believe that children should be given homework every day, while others argue that homework is unnecessary and that children should spend more time playing and relaxing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.”

Different people argue that
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homework on a daily basis,
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others
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that it is not a requirement,but
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they need to have
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for themselves to relax and enjoy. In
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I’ll discuss both perspectives and give my final thought. On the one hand, giving students tasks
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can help with their academic progress. If students are given daily
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they will be more familiar with the type of questions they might face in exams.
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, practice makes perfect,so
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in homework will reduce the
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of mistakes during the
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exam. Stress can
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affect the results of the test, so being used to
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problems will
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the amount of stress. As an example, at many
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there is
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special care for students with lower grades,and most of the
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can see a noticeable change in their grades after the extra hours of practice.
On the other hand
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, allowing
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to enjoy their free
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own benefit.
Children
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are not robots. You can’t force them into finishing the academic requirements
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. Having their own
time
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to relax and enjoy will reduce the amount of pressure on them,and
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can not be
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achieved
if they are always busy with academic tasks. Days off must be offered as a solution. It will become less stressful for them to do their homework when they have their own
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to enjoy later. As an example,many therapists
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parent to give their
children
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their own
time
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of joy,because it has an impact on their mental health and daily life. In conclusion,I
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believe
that it is highly important to find a balanced
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between the two,because it’s important to give
children
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their own free
time
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without forgetting the need to make academic progress.

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar to make ideas clear. For example, use 'every day' instead of 'everyday', and spell 'actual' correctly.
coherence
Use short, simple sentences and clear links. This helps the flow of ideas.
structure
State your view clearly in the start and restate it in the end.
task
Give one strong example for each view to show your point.
grammar
Check marks and commas to toon the text so it is easy to read.
structure
Two sides are shown with 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
content
There is a clear view in the conclusion.
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The main idea is easy to see.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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