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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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present
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the present
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 Norbiton industrial area
siteplan
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site plan
 and
future
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the future
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developed
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development
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 plan for
this
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 district. As the most
essintial
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essential
 points should be mentioned
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first
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firstly
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firstly,
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 usage of
this
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 area will be changed from industrial to residential
and
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, and
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additionally
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additionally,
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 the vast variety of buildings will be constructed to meet
dwellers
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dwellers'
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 demands.
While
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 just
main
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the main
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squre
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square
 and two streets
in
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on
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south
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the south
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 and east
side
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sides
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 of
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the squre
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squre
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square
 remain the same,
every thing
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everything
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 will
transformed
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be transformed
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. Two main
street
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streets
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 will be constructed
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, witch
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witch
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which
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branched
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branch
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 in
north
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the north
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 and north-west of
main
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the main
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squre
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square
, north street
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. North Street
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 goes
beyong
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beyond
 the river
in
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into
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 the farmland with a bridge. All eight factory buildings will be gathered and
instead
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seven
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of seven
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house
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houses
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 in line with the West- North, North and East streets will be constructed. Some urban facility centre will be added to the district to meet
citizen's
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citizens'
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 needs.
for
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For
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instant
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,
shop
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the shop
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 and medical
center
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centre
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 around the main
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squre
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square
 and school at the
edn
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end
 of
the
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apply
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East
street
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Street
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words squre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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