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The diagram below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles.
The diagram illustrates steps in the process of recycling used
glass
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bottles
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.
Overall
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, we could see that there were three main stages in the process. The process began with wasted
glass
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bottles
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were
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being
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 collected by
collection
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the collection
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 point,
then
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which
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they
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 were transported to
address
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the address
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, and ends with
be
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being
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 reused to sell at the supermarkets. Once the first stage was completed, most
bottles
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 were put through high-pressure water to clean
it
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them
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.
Following
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this
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, these glasses were divided into three different
colors
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colours
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,
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:
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 clear, green, and brown. After that, the wasted
glass
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bottles
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 were transported to a
glass
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 factory to become
glass
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 pieces,
then
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be
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were
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 burned in
furnace
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a furnace
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,
about
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at about
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 600
degree
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degrees
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 to 800
degree
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degrees
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. The final step in the second stage was that
glasses
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the glasses
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 were separated into two categories, recycled liquid
glass
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 and new liquid
glass
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, shaped in
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glass
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a glass
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 mould. The next stage was to be bottled,
then
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 to
reuse
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be reused
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 at supermarkets. At the three stages of recycling, the
glass
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were
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was
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 separated and burned, the resulting molten
glass
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 could
finally
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 be moulded to create new items to sell at the stores.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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