Some people think that job satisfaction is more important while other people think that a stable job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is widely known that
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in the modern world
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need employment because of
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the rising
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population.
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,there are
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different
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opinions that most individuals consider that a person might be delighted when
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in
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job
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they wants
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wants
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want
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.
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,some
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firmly believe that the most
thing
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important thing
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is a stable
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in life.That's why
this
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essay will outline both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand,it
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true that individuals need
work
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to live in good life.What's more,
unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate is rapidly growing because of
high
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the high
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birth rate.That's why humans suffer from unemployment ,and
also
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those are forced to
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any stable jobs ,even do not want to
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.In many
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it is too hard to
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that some managers treat harshly to employees
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harshly.
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, in many areas,especially,developed conditions
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people
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, people
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are obliged to
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commit
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minor and major crimes to earn more money.In
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short,
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in modern life, finding a stable
job
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is nearly impossible. On the
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other
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hand,if
people
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find a
job
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,
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apply
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which they
want
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want,
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that
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they
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those
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apply
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might be happier than
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the unemployed
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.One of the main reasons
that
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when individuals are doing their
work
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,they want to do
this
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themselves and
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this
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which
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causes
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helps
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growing
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the country.
To sum up
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,it is important that working a
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which
people
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want to
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live
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without any
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stress
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.
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,it is
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recommended
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that if
people
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can not find a
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,
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apply
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which they want
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, that
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that
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they
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work
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should work
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short-term
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a short-term
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job
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.

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planning
Plan your answer before you write. Put two ideas for each side and then share your own view.
grammar
Use simple sentences. Check the form of verbs and stay with one form.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, but, so, and end with a clear conclusion.
content
The essay tries to show both sides of the issue.
structure
There is a short end that asks to sum up the view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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