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The charts below show the percentage of waterused for different purposes in six areas of theworld.

The charts below show the percentage of waterused for different purposes in six areas of theworld.
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amount
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 of
water
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 used for unlike
ways
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purposes
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 in six
areas
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.
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, there were varied figures, and most
areas
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used
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to use
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water
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 for agriculture, except for Europe. In general, the proportion of domestic
use
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 in different parts of Asia was the same. In terms of North and South America and Europe, around 50% of
water
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 is used for industrial
purpose
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purposes
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 in both the first and third
areas
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, and they consume 39% and 32% respectively for farming. The percentages for domestic
use
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 in these two
regions
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 stand at 15% or less. South America uses around 70% of
water
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 for agriculture, with it
utilizing
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 one tenth of
total
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the total
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 amount of
water
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, and having the highest domestic
use
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 among all
regions
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, at 19%. Regarding the remaining
areas
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, the figures are totally different. The percentages for domestic
use
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 in these three
regions
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 are similar, ranging from 7% to 9%, with those of agricultural
use
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 representing over 80%, and Central Asia using the most amount of
water
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 for the same purpose, at 88%. 5% of
water
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 is consumed for industrial
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, the lowest number in all charts,
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 the proportion for South East Asia is equal to the sum of the other two
regions
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, at 12%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, areas, use, regions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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