Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environment problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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extent air
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caused by cars
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wast
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polutes
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pollutes
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some
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individuals think that the main
environment
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environmental
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issues of our time
is
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are
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the loss of particular
species
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of
plants
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and
animals
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while
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other
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others
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think that there are more important
environment
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environmental
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problem
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believe
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that there
is
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evironment
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environmental
problems
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other than the loss of particular
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species
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species,
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wihich
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which
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pollution
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every
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species
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of
plants
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and
animals
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are
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important for
earth
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the earth
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for example
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bees
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, humans needs bees to
exsist
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essential
because they help
fertlieze
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fertilise
flowers by collecting
spores
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pollen
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from male
flower
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to
another
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apply
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female
flower
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flowers
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,
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this
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process
help
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plants
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produce fruits and vegetables, which
is very
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are
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essential for humans.
on the other hand
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.
i
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I
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believe that there are more important
problems
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like air
polutions
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pollution
and plastic waste .
these
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problems
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are the main
essues
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issues
for losing particular
species
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,
for
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example
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plastic waste
polutes
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pollutes
lands and
water
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making
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it harder for
animals
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and humans
,
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to consume
water
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without microplastics
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to
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conclude, the main
invironmental
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environmental
problem of our time is not the loss of
species
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of animal and
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plants
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plant
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, but
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species, but
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the
problems
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that
plastics
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plastic
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waste
cause
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causes
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to our planet
which
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, which
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is cruel to
animals
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and
plants
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task response
Make your view clear in the introduction. Start with a sentence that says you will discuss both sides and give your own opinion at the end.
organization
Use a clear plan: one paragraph for the problem of species loss, one for other problems, and one for your view.
grammar
Use simple grammar and fix errors: 'pollution', 'plastic waste', 'bees help pollinate' etc.
coherence
Use simple linking words to connect ideas: 'first', 'second', 'however', 'in addition'.
lexical
Provide one or two clear examples that support your point.
content
You show an effort to discuss both sides.
content
You mention bees and their role, which is good evidence.
task response
There is a final opinion statement.
lexical
Your ideas are easy to understand.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • habitat
  • extinction
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable
  • conservation
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