The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.
The bar chart gives information about the percentage of investors in five categories of
profiting
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profit
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in Brazil between 2009 and
2019
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2019,
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with weather predictions in 2029 .
Overall
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, the
amount
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number
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of buyers in
finance
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the finance
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section
were
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was
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higher in all of the given
period
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,
in contrast
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to
manufactoring
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manufacturing
and food
procesessing
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processing
, recording the least amount of
share holders
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shareholders
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in all years. In terms of finance, they were the highest in 2009 compared to
it's
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its
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relatives, with well over 30%,
increacing
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increasing
in 2019, and again with the predictions in 2029, with about 35% and well over 40% respectively.
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the food process and manufactoring being the neglected amount compared to others with a maximum of approximately 20% in 2009 and in 2019 in both categories, as opposed to tourism and foil sources, where they kept a steady line and having the most benift after finance, being over 25% in 2009 at peak, and above 30% in 2019 respectively, with expections of a slight decrease in 2029 for both.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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