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News media is more influential nowadays. Some people think it is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
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 digital era,
news
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media
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 have become more and more powerful and influential. In
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 regard, the question arises whether
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phenomenom
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phenomenon
 is positive or negative.
Although
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 access to
news
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 is much easier and faster today, issues
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 as sensationalism, misinformation and manipulation make it a potential danger to society.
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, with the advent of new technologies,
news
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 and information are delivered instantly through various
media
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. At the same time, new actors and communication platforms have emerged, taking advantage of social networks to reach millions of people. Communicators
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 as influencers or streamers
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 profit from their views and followers, and many of them, whether out of ignorance or ambition, misinform their audience. A study by Oxford University indicated that content and communication creators could have a reach almost 100 times greater than official
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.
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, the most recent technological advances linked to the
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 are extremely dangerous tools to influence, and
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, to confuse.
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, artificial intelligence has managed to create images and videos that are extremely credible, and many
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this
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 tech to create biased and false
news
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. Fake and sensational
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, if they are well made, can cause chaos and cause people to make wrong decisions based on what they saw.
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,
news
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media
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 are powerful platforms for diffusion, which in turn leads to people with personal interests
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 using them to misinform and profit from them by failing to provide the truth.
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, technologies
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 as AI
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 produce increasingly credible
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 to the point of not knowing if what we see is real or not.

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task response
State a clear view in the first paragraph and restate it in the end. Mention a small good point as well to show balance.
coherence
Use more linking words so ideas move well from one to the next. Keep one idea per paragraph.
grammar
Fix small grammar errors and spelling (for example, phenomenom) and use shorter sentences to be safe.
language
Keep ideas simple and easy to read. Do not use long, hard phrases.
content
The writer shows how new tech like AI can make news seem true, which is a strong point of view.
content
There is a clear stance against the bad side, and the essay tries to show the bad effect of media.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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