You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, threre are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, *describe the situation *explain your problems and why it is difficult to work *say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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letter to express my concerns that I have been experiencing for the
last
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two months. My name is Amarpreet Singh
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I reside in
room
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no 9592.
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I have been living at
this
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hostel for the
last
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four years without any major issues, the present roommate has been causing considerable inconvenience.
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with, he plays loud music at night without considering others.
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,
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hostel rules
does
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not allow guests, he frequently brings his friends into the
room
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.
As a result
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of the loud music, I was unable to sleep
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leads
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to me feeling tired throughout the day and negatively
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my academic performance.
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, since the
room
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has
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small
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, inviting friends makes it overcrowded and very uncomfortable for me. I would,
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, kindly request you to take an
approriate
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appropriate
action on
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matter, or, if possible, please assign me a private
room
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where
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rest and study. Given that exams are scheduled next month, I would appreciate your prompt attention to
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issue. Yours faithfully, Amarpreet Singh.

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task response
Make one clear request in a short last paragraph. Avoid extra details that do not help your aim.
coherence and cohesion
Break long sentences in to two. Use simple linking words to guide the reader.
content
Clear description of the problem and impact on study.
tone
Polite and formal tone, appropriate for an officer.
content
States preferred outcome: a private room.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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