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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart illustrates the data about the number of filmed movies in the 3-year period starting from 2007 in 5 different countries.
Overall
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,
The
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the
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 countries A and B
outstanded
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stood out
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 with their major rates among other countries
which
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, which
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 showed only small numbers. In 2007, in
country
Use synonyms
 A
the
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, the
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 quantity of films constituted approximately 90
which
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, which
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 did not change in 2008.The figure decreased in 2009
equaling
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, equaling
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to
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apply
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about 77. Following up, the rate of
country
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 B in 2009 was below
it
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that
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. Just as in
country
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 A , in
country
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 B the indications were the same in
Correct article usage
the firstt
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firstt
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first
 two years. In 2007, the number of films in C was near 8, it increased slowly from
year-to-year pasting
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year to year, peaking
through
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at
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 9 in 2008 and reaching about 18 in 2009.In
country
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 D, the rate of films was approximately 16 in 2007
which
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, which
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 went down to 12 in 2008.In 2009, it experienced a rise
up
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apply
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to 15.The numbers in E
was
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were
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 quite similar
,
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;
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it
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they
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 constituted about 12 in all years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Film production
  • Trends
  • Consistently
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Patterns
  • Increased/Decreased
  • Analyzed
  • Anomalies
  • Industry changes
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural aspects
  • Collectively
  • Overall trend
  • Reported
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