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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no denying the fact that learning languages is a
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crucial
 thing.
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 it is a commonly held belief that being in a
country
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 where you have to speak a
foreign
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language
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 can cause
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significant
 problems, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that being in a foreign
country
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 is a
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 opportunity to acquire a new
language
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.
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 with, learning a new
language
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nees
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needs
 motivation, and time.
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, living in a
country
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 where you have to speak a foreign
language
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,
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this
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is
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an opportunity
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 to deal with
people
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.
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, some
people
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 face initial difficulties,
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but learning
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 a foreign
language
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 creates opportunities for integration rather than serious social problems.
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, when foreigners practice the local
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 in daily situations,
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 as shopping or greeting
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, they gradually become more confident and accepted in the community.
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Another
 point to consider, when you
living
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are living
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 in a foreign
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 and learning
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country's
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the country's
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language
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language,
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 it will allow you to learn more about the traditions and culture in that
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that every
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situation
 in your
daliy
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daily
 life will teach you more and more about
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language
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, and
also
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 the
country
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.
Moreover
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, learning
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the host
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country
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's
language
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 will help you behave better in that
country
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.
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, if you are abroad and try to talk to
people
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 there, they will be friendly
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 you. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that staying in a foreign
country
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 is a great opportunity for
people
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 to learn its
language
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, and
this
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 will be a way to strengthen relations between
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people who
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 have various nationalities.

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You show a clear view on the problem.
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Some good ideas about how language can help life in a new land.
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You use an example about daily life like talking to people.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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